100 Mile Diet Skeptic: Is Eating Local Really Better... continued

      The author of this article is Chad Skelton.  Chad Skelton is from the UK.  He also wrote the response to this article; "Still Not Convinced."  Chad came upon the writing of this article because his wife is a Food Network fanatic, and came to some points on how eating local benefits.  The audience of this article would be locals of a certain area.  Specifically, Chad's audience are locals living in the UK.
      The authors initial purpose is to try and get people to eat locally.  He puts forth a couple of key points  of the effects of eating locally, some good and some bad.  Two tools that Chad does a good job using are Pathos and Logos.  Chad explains consequences of eating local, and uses facts to support his stance.
     Overall I think that Chad did a good job in making his article effective.  I had no idea the effects of eating local.  Chad made me see these effects of eating local.  Now I am convinced to eat local more often.

100 mile diet skeptic: is eating local really better

author: Chad Skelton, chad is from the UK

Audience: locals of a city.  probably in the Uk

Authors purpose: he is trying to get locals to eat local, because right now they are not.

Tools: Some ethos, and some good logos

Effective?: yes, to help the my own community, and after reading this, I am convinced to eat local.

Grammar Errors

1. Original: This way, it is harder to lower your GPA.
    Problem: comma. Rule: one phrase, not two
    Solution: This way it is harder to lower you GPA.
2. Original: This way it is harder to lower your GPA.  You would have to fail the class for your GPA to lower.
    Problem: fragment. Rule: one independent clause, one idea.
    Solution: This way it is harder to lower your GPA, you would have to fail the class for your GPA to lower.
3. Original: There is a simple solution to this, and that is to make religion classes pass/fail.
    Problem: Dangling and Misplaced Modifiers. Rule: too many unnecessary words.
    Solution: A simple solution to this is to make religion classes pass/fail.
4. Original: Other than BYU, no other Universities recognize religion as a credit...
    Problem: capitalization. Rule: "universities" should not be capitalized
    Solution: Other than BYU, no other universities recognize religion as a credit...
5. Original: One solution to this issue may be to make religion classes' pass/fail.
    Problem: apostrophe. Rule: the word "classes" does not need an apostrophe.
    Solution: One solution to this issue may be to make religion classes pass/fail.

Prompt numba 2

My Paper

Ethos
   - acknowledge that I am a freshman, let the audience know who I am.
   - add some quotes and let my audience know where I got my sources from
   - Let the audience know that I am a student at BYU and have experienced these problems myself
Pathos
   - Use imagery to set up a situation
   - Give some real life examples
   - I need to figure out if my audience better values the grade of the class they receive, or the spiritual            
     uplift.
Logos
   - Better organize my paper so that it flows from topic to topic
   - Do not intermix my topics too much so that it gets confusing
   - Add more evidence to back up my claim.

Prompt numba 2

Pride and Prejudice

Ethos (building credibility)
    - "Being as I am to inherit this estate after the death of your father."
    - "I have a connection to a noble family."
    - "No better an offer will ever be made unto you."
Pathos (emotional appeal)
    - "Your modesty adds to your other perfections." complimenting
    - "Such an elegant female."
    - "You are uniformly charming."
Logos (reasoning)
    - "Your feminine delicacy will lead you to dissemble." claiming what he knows about women.
    - "Resolving to choose a wife from among his daughters."
    - "My reasons for marrying"
           - "First, it is the right for every clergyman  to set such an example."
           - "It will add greatly to my happiness."
           - "I have received recommendation."

All about me

A little bit about me.  So I am from South Ogden, Utah.  I have four younger siblings, three brothers and one sister.  I have lived in South Ogden my whole life, moving three times, and I love it here!  I went to Bonneville High School where I was a cheerleader for one year, SBO for two, and a part of the tennis team all three years.  My family and myself are all big tennis players and skiers(water and snow).  I also enjoy all outdoor sports, sort of a granola.  I am also sort of a tree hugger.  I recycle everything!  I consider myself saving the world:)  I also enjoy dancing and being creative, and I hope to major in graphic design.  So now you know a little bit about Cassidy Heaton!

Op Ed prompt

Religion classes

My topic is religion classes at BYU, and that they should be pass/fail.  Religion classes at BYU can be a little difficult, especially depending on the teacher.  You could get a religion teacher who makes the class really hard, you do poorly in the class, and then your GPA is hurt.  Religion classes should be almost a break, where you can go to be fed, but not stress and pressure.  No other university recognizes these religion credits, they just recognize the bad GPA that could have been caused by those classes.  While you could do poorly in a religion class, you could also do really well and help you GPA, but this takes some serious work.  It is also a great opportunity to strengthen your testimony, but at times that is hard when you are stressing over tests and assignments in the class.  My proposal, that I believe would solve the issue at hand, is that we make religion classes at BYU pass/fail.

let me know what you think group!:)